Football in our lives
Football has huge effects on our lives. At the beggining, Football is the sport where different people meet to support their favorite teams, clubs and national, what makes good and bad consequences. First, making new friendships, exchanging cultures and languages, increasing solidarity and agreement, also delivering the feeling of joy when watching a match are some good impacts of the game.
Second, this sport has also some bad drafts that didn't exist in the past like gambling and betting on teams (causes the loss of money), violence in the stadiums (injuries and deaths) and the hatred caused by poloitical interventions (like the case of Algeria and Egypt).
Then, we shouldn't lay down for the bad side and let it control us, but we have to take the good and leave the rest, which doesn't fit our Muslim life. At the end, Football causes a lot of two side changes and manipulations in people's lives.
"Amine Ace"
I like a lot of things in your essay like the explanation that you make between bracketsn and the organisation of ideas but i d'idnt prefer the way that you move from the firs part in the first paragraph to the second one but generally it was a verry good essay
ReplyDeletefirst of all I would like to say it is a good idea but their is some contradiction for exempel you start with at the beggining then you add first and that is wrong because it most be only one transition not 2 in the same time the transition of discribing are used like that( first ,second,therd or finlly witch equalle therd) also you didnt capitlize some important world you need to be very carfull next time and review your draft many time befor post it
ReplyDeleteHello! Amine it's me again i really like your subject and it was a good essay really nice one .I realy loved the explanations but there is one thing that i can blame you for , and transaction from the introduction to the body and the start of the final paragraphand and i was going to tell you about cordination but i see that my frend wassila have done it.
ReplyDelete